4.20.2013

Ringer


The man behind the counter stirred.  (There are your six words! And how about some more?)

He’d been sitting perfectly still for over half an hour, the kneading of his powerful jaw the only sign of inner turmoil. The man stretched and looked around his shop. Nothing had changed. No one came to eclectic Baraway Lane when the weather was bad, and oh.. it was bad. It had been sleeting cats and dogs for three days keeping the buskers, and the onlookers, at bay. It was bad for business, but great for thinking.

It was three weeks since the girl had gone missing from Ringer’s shop. Vanished, into thin air. Leaving nothing but a smell of perfume and a phone receiver, swinging from its cord. That rhythmic swing haunted Ringer, taunting him in his dreams. Every lead he’d followed led to a dead end and even three days of thinking hadn’t left him with anything new to follow up on...

This month I am participating in the April A-Z Challenge! My theme for the month is ‘character development.’ Some days will be exercises from John Gardner’s The Art of Fiction, others will be profiles of characters from my book Armageddon: Pick Your Plot, and some will just be random characters I make up. I hope you enjoy! Ringer is a character I created last spring who is part of a work in progress.
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16 comments:

  1. This is a great theme for a-z. Nice writeup. I hope Ringer finds his girl.

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  2. Samantha Jones10:27 PM

    Excellent tension in this scene - Is there more?

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  3. Sania Heba11:01 PM

    The last paragraph got to me. Like really got to me. I don't know why but it makes me frustrated that you didn't write more to this. ;p

    Following! :)

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  4. :) There actually is more! A couple thousand words more. Hoping to share them with everyone at some point!

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  5. Yup! Quite a bit :)

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  6. He will! I'm not sure how yet.. But he will.

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  7. Aww sorry. And you're welcome? :)

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  8. Kristen Dyrr2:08 PM

    Nice one! I love your theme. You really drew me in with few words. Just two paragraphs, and I'm hoping to read more of the mystery.

    #atozchallenge, Kristen's blog: kristenhead.blogspot.com

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  9. Karen Gowen2:24 PM

    I am really excited to be your 75th follower woo hoo! Visiting from the Challenge and looking forward to returning for more. I like the A to Z Minion badge LOL. They never had minions when I was a host-- if I'd have known I'd get minions I would have signed up again to host, dang it. I want minions!

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  10. I really like this piece--you've captured my attention right off the bat, and you've left me wanting more. Always a good sign! I've signed up via email and will be back to read both earlier and new posts.

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  11. Tina Downey6:09 AM

    Really good. Love the dangling receiver and perfume part - so vivid! Glad to see you have some new followers!

    Tina @
    Life
    is Good


    Co-host,
    April 2013 A-Z
    Challenge Blog


    @TinaLifeisGood,
    #atozchallenge

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  12. Ooh yeah.. Good call! This girl is not nearly as awesome as Trinity though lol

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  13. I'm sure you could get them to make you a retroactive badge! :) Or, if you host again, you'll surely get minions!

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  14. Cool! Hopefully I'll be sharing Ringer's story with everyone soon. Aiming for by the end of the year :)

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  15. Fun, huh? Love A-Z for bringing in the new blood :)

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