4.09.2013

H is for 'enry

Barn's empty now. The cows chew their cud, sure, and the 'orses stamp, but there's no life there. E'en when I enter, I can feel their eyes - unforgivin'. Indian Summer gives every peel in the paint a shadow a mile long. Even the flowers by the window've dried up. They're pale, washed out. Don' understand how all the color left...  I go 'bout my business but nothin's the same - it's just lonely eyes starin' and me all et up inside. All et up.. Ain't nothin' the same..

This month I am participating in the April A-Z Challenge! My theme for the month is ‘character development.’ Some days will be exercises from John Gardner’s The Art of Fiction, others will be profiles of characters from my book Armageddon: Pick Your Plot, and some will just be random characters I make up. I hope you enjoy!

10 comments:

  1. Tina Downey11:06 AM

    Oh I love this piece. So much emotion, and you nailed the dialect, and the longing. Just beautifully done.

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  2. Andrew Leon2:47 PM

    Clever!
    Author of Shadow Spinner (just by the way), the cover Rusty is working on.

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  3. I love the dialect in this peice.

    Sonia Lal

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  4. S.P.Bowers7:02 PM

    Wow, that's very vivid and leaves me wondering so many things. Great snip.

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  5. Ohh awesome! Welcome, Andrew :)

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  6. Patricia F10:39 PM

    Great voice in this little piece!

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  7. Kellie Netherwood1:53 AM

    Short and sweet...great evidence that a great piece of writing is defined by quality and not quantity!


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    A to Z Participant (A to Z of Travel Bucket List Inspiration)

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  8. Elaine Smith2:12 AM

    Poor 'enry easy times are like sleepwalking through times - after all the hard work is over it seems life is lacking challenge. I loved the tone, mood and voice you captured in your post.

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